该用户匿名发帖 发表于 2009-7-25 20:20   全显示 1楼
The story is OK.  You can really make this story a great story.  A lot of places need more detail to describe what and how it happens.   More details on how she changes will be great.  Anyway, thanks a lot for your story.
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